(super spoilers warning! you really should go and read this chapter before i get going here! and chapter one if you haven't read that already!)
so did it really make sense to end chapter one so quickly and in that exact spot?
the answer is yeppers, folks. because chapter one is where bitsy is, and chapter two is totally a page turning for her. we see a smidge of her morning routine and then she goes outside and it's just rained overnight and the whole city is beautiful and sparkling around her. dang is it ever well described! and then we get another one of those one-sentence hum-dinger chapters:
"It was one of those days Bitsy could have sworn she was alive."
we follow her on her way to work and learn so much about bitsy's android world and culture without any of it interrupting the story flow. there's even some mythology or history, nobody knows which, about the guy who set up the whole "nobody knows for sure if there are still real people still alive and mixed in with the androids or not" scheme. get this: "professor heisenborg." (omg, i was on fire writing this!)
then -- big twist! bitsy literally runs into the plot, a guy who spills coffee on her from the collision and, when she looks up, turns out to have these brown, brown eyes that convince her he's Real.
this is another 10/10 chapter, guys. still super short, but it still does everything it needs to, and with panache!
also, now that i'm remembering it, i wasn't completely on fire writing it, because i actually worked really hard finding ways to make bitsy's speech and the language of her culture just jam-packed with computer lingo. (probably part of why these chapters are so short ... i was really sweating over that stuff.)
man, i'm enjoying the heck out of reading and reviewing this!
awesome idea, yesterday claire!
xoxo,
today claire
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